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Falling of Ashes by ~LFC-Nix:iconLFC-Nix:



The Ashes fall from skies above
The Ashes float on gentles seas
The Ashes dance upon the fire
The Ashes lie where i be.

I once was an angel floating gently on the sea
I once sored higher than a great oak tree
I once sailed on the open sea
I once loved thee.

The Ashes that fell, fell for me
The Ashes that fell were me
The Ashes that fall are for you and me
The Ashes that lie on rotten ground are the rotten lives around.

The falling rain
The sun so bright
The Autumn leaves falling
The Winter snow crisp and white.

The Falling of Ashes has no meaning to life
The Falling of Ashes shows no light
The Falling of Ashes is gentle and swift
The Falling of Ashes is the end of it.

The Falling of Ashes what do you see?
The Falling of Ashes can you hear me?
The Falling of Ashes i am not here
The Falling of Ashes i will never be here.

The Falling of Ashes.
©2006-2009 ~LFC-Nix
:iconlfc-nix:

Author's Comments

I wrote this randomly, without really knowing what i was going to write about until i started writing it, its very mellow..

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:iconal-the-monkey:
that was ace nixxy. :hug:
keep up the writings.

peace
Al

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Hallward.
The Apparent Foux
:iconsporenza:
Personally, I would fix up the rythm of the poem. It's great, let me assure you, but I was always told that poetry is meant to be read aloud. Some of the rythms don't match up, which can be fixed with some commas, semi-colons etc.

But then again, maybe you were using the rythm to enhance the feeling of destruction and discontinuity, which I think you were. Great job
:salute:

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We are like moths drawn to the flame; we are blinded, and lose our way.

!!soahc dna yhcrana
:iconvino89:
wow thats amazing Nixxy Pixxy, how did you come up with it? i never could write poems...Love you Baby!!!

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Xbox Live Gamertag: Demon Realm
:iconlfc-nix:
how did i come up with it? dunno just kinda did...Love you too baby!!

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Above Us Only Sky!

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